T2+Sort+Story

r__**Rubric for assessing your progress across the curriculum levels: Narrative**__ __**Student version.**__ **adapted from asTTle by R G Diver 2010.** **Can you answer ‘Yes,I do!’ to all the indicators at P? If not you must go to B; if you can then go to A.**

**curriculum level** || **3B** || **3P** || **3A** || **4B** || **4P** || **4A** || **5P** || **success criteria or indicators for each dimension** || You attempt, sometimes with evidence || You attempt with evidence ||  || You do engage || You engage with a clear voice and hold interest. ||  ||  Your work has clear impact. || **audience and purpose** || You attempt at times to capture the audience interest and have a storyteller’s perspective. || You have 2-3 pieces of evidence where you attempt to capture the audience interest and adopt a storyteller’s perspective. || You attempt to capture the audience interest and adopt a storyteller’s perspective but don’t fully engage your audience. || You engage the audience and often hold their attention. Your narrator ‘voice’ may occasionally be heard and make the reader react. The world you create is credible. || You engage the audience and hold their attention. Your narrator ‘voice’ may clearly be heard and make the reader react. The world you create is consistent and readers can relate to it. || You engage the audience and hold their attention right to the end. Your narrator ‘voice’ may be heard quite distinctly and make the reader react but you may not always entertain. || You engage the audience with deliberate language choices and hold their attention right to the end. Your narrator ‘voice’ may be heard quite distinctly and entertain the audience. || **content and ideas** || You include the essentials: setting, character problem events and attempt a resolution but without very much description. There are parts that do not entertain as well as other parts. || You include the essentials: setting, character problem events and attempt a resolution. You attempt to create a credible world and give the reader most of the information needed to get them interested. Your story has a point. || You include the essentials: setting, character problem events and a resolution that is not fully developed. You have several parts where you attempt to create a credible world and get the reader interested. || You have included all the elements of orientation, complication, resolution and sometimes climax and coda. Most description and detail is appropriate and helps sustain the interest of your readers. || You have **//developed//** most of the elements of orientation, complication, resolution and sometimes climax and coda. You have given sufficient description and detail to entertain the reader. || You have developed all the elements of orientation, complication, resolution and sometimes climax and coda. You have given clear thought that shows deliberate selection. Your characters and events often engage and entertain. || You definitely construct a credible world with engaging and entertaining characters, events and setting through clearly deliberate language and structural choices. || **structure** **important elements:** **orientation** **complication** **resolution** **Others:** **rising action** **climax** **falling action** **coda** || You have no run-on sentences and your story is organised around some events. || You have some sequencing to link parts of your story. You have some paragraphs with linking words or phrases. You order the important elements correctly. You have a series of events. || You begin to structure within your paragraphs accurately. You sequence your events for some effect. You begin to use phrases to link-like ‘ later that evening’ or ‘not long after’ or ‘because of that’ or similar || You show more control over the story elements such as plot and character development. You nearly always paragraph accurately. || You have sequenced the plot according to narrative structure and have linked using adverbs, conjunctions or phrases that make your story flow. You use SEE paragraphs and link ideas. || You begin to link paragraphs thematically to your topic. You select a range of effective conjunctions or adverbs to show time passing or cause and effect. || You have controlled and linked all the structural elements and experimented with some. You may move from the present moment to past or future times.(flashback or foreshadow) || **language** **‘ use’ means it must be there. It does not mean ‘punctuate accurately’ as this is marked under surface features.** || You begin to add detail using a variety of verbs,some adjectives, adverbs and basic language features-like simile. You may use dialogue where appropriate. You experiment with higher level vocabulary. Your language is mostly appropriate for your purpose. || Your choice of language is varied and writing style is just right for storytelling. You add interest and detail mainly through use of adverbs and adjectives, and use dialogue appropriately. || Your choice of language is varied and often precise. You control your writing style for interesting storytelling. You add interest and detail mainly through use of adverbs and adjectives, and use dialogue appropriately. || Your choice of language and style features enhance your storytelling. You begin to use language devices -figurative and parts of speech-to engage and add detail. || You select some words for impact-like precise verbs, adverbs and adjectives. You capture thoughts and feelings selecting language devices that are effective. You use dialogue purposefully. Your choice of language and style features suits your purpose well. || You describe actions and events, thoughts and feelings using a range of words that help you achieve impact. Your dialogue has some personal voice appropriate to the character. Your language choices add to the credibility of your characters and events. || The language you select is precise and has clear impact. Thoughts and feelings are captured. You have a range of language devices and vocabulary. Your style is distinctive in several parts. You control your narrative to the end. || **next steps comments or reflection:** what you must do to make further progress. ||  ||   ||   ||   ||   ||   ||   || **The title of my short story is -** Star was I am writing a Short Story under the theme Tales of Mystery and Suspense. A narrative is a literary text in which a story is told, with the purpose of entertaining, teaching or informing the reader. The story is usually fiction (imaginary), although it may be based on actual events.

**My learning goal is** **1. To Finnish my story on time.** **2. To have no spelling mistakes.** **Purpose/Audience** To entertain and capture a readers interest. **Content & Ideas**
 * My writing will develop a plot: what is going to happen?
 * I can set the scene of my story by describing the setting: Where / When will the story take place.
 * All of my writing needs to link. How will the story begin? What will be the problem? How is the problem going to be resolved?
 * I can articulate my theme / message through my words.

**Series of actions** **Planning my Writing** - Development of Plot **- save here** L.I. To write a short story by where the text follows a series of actions, carried out by well developed main characters, using language features that capture the attention of the reader.
 * Orientation
 * Complication or problem
 * Resolution

S.C. 1.) I can see and point out the orientation, complication or problem and resolution within my story.  2.) I can identify good use of descriptive writing, using ‘show and not tell’, action verbs, past tense, use of the senses (smell, hear, see, taste, feel like) 3.) My writing follows a logical sequence to show a series of actions. 4.) I have used correct spelling, punctuation and grammar in my short story. 5.) I have created imagery in my writing by using metaphor, personification, simile and onomatopoeia.

Title As Ob1 is briefing the men Anakin sky walker comes in ‘’ are the troops ready for the raid ,, ‘’ yes I have tolled them what to expect on curry. brrrrrrm went the party ship as Thai niter the atmosphere of curry one of the troupers says ‘’ its sure hot down here as the party ship land on curry the smell of burning wood saturates the land the troops move toward the smell and they see droids burning down villagers one by one the captain says attack the troops take the droids by surprise one by one the droids fall to the ground the troops make the half burnt village as a base. The next day the troops get ready for the assault on the droid army they go in the direction they in up in a Forrest and then from no where come hundreds of villages come from behind all the trees in site all of them have blasters surprising to the republic there all gingers they make a trues so now the army in in the thousands the next after hours of walking they see the factory but it is heavily armed they start the attack first with the walkers then the troops run in with the rocket lunchers then the blusters the droids come out one after the other but the Jedi are to good for the droids then the crawlers come for every crawlers kills two troops but for every troop kills three crawlers when then is no more droids left on the battle field then the battle droids come. Anakin sky walker sends his padawan through a secret chamber under the factory to blow it up from the inside out the boom is in place Asoka gets out safely then the factory goes up in flames.

**Teacher Comment**

**Peer assessment** **great story and like the star wars theam and how you said the charaters Ob1 and Anakin sky walker.** **Self assessment** **i did good and i like my story because cool and action.** What were your writing goals and how have you used them to help you improve the quality of this story? What part of the story do you like the most and why? What have you learnt about your writing from doing this exercise? What areas of improvement would you like to work on in your next piece of writing?